Wednesday, April 06, 2005

Morning Commute: Entry Twenty-Five:





bulbs loom green
along the roadside
--traffic cops


3 comments:

Justin said...

3-5-3 is wrong
5-7-5 is haiku
no dessert for you

Dermott said...

Yours is a literal interpretation of the form promulgated by the sluggish elementary teachers of your youth, not in tune to the true essence of haiku which keeps in mind simplicity and rhythm (i.e. seventeen syllables in Japanese [due to the multi-syllabic-ness of the language] delivers, on average, about the equivalent of eleven English syllables).

Justin said...

Always the rebel.